Caravan Ray - The Beginning Of The End
I guess the 3rd time is the charm. This is the third time you’ve signed up, and the first song you’ve turned in. In this case it was worth the wait. It’s upbeat, fun, and the jokes got a laugh. Of the people who took the challenge on directly...this is one of the better ones.
Governing Dynamics - Swing Shift
Hit the challenge square on, and rocked it hard. The ONLY thing I didn’t like about this entry was the slower section toward the end. I won’t say it sounded out of place, but I didn’t think it was needed or added much to the song. I’d just cut it.
Francis Wms. - Redundant Redunit
I’m not sure what to make of this. You’ve taken clips from other places that aren’t really lyrics, and used them as the only lyrics in your song. At least that seems to be what you did. Did you recreate all these clips? Either way I wouldn't call them lyrics.
Whether it’s DQed or not wouldn’t change my opinion of the track. I couldn’t really make out the vast majority of the words/lyrics by listening alone. The last time I heard something like this was the last time I tried to tune in a radio station in that was just barely out of range.
RC - Goodbye Everybody
Wow, this sounds awesome. The music & vocals just hit the sweet spot. Lyrically it was the most predictable song of the bunch in my opinion though. The lyrics aren’t bad, it’s just that nothing surprised me. I think everyone would like to blow up or burn down their place of employment at some point. Obvious or not, it’s a great song & it’s going on my MP3 player. I REALLY look forward to hearing more from you in round 2.
Mariah Mercedes - Ending(eternal)
If you were fishing you would go home empty handed. You take on the challenge really walks the line. But “work” was left open to interpretation, and you stay within the boundaries. Not really my kinda lyrics, but your biggest issue is the first item I mentioned.
Jailhouse Payback - Escalator
The vocals & music is fine. Better than fine, it’s very easy on the ears. The lyrics...eh... I mean I don’t get a clear picture of anything other than it’s the last day at work. The story behind it is a mess. I think you’ll move on...but I’m not confident in that prediction.
Edric Haleen - The Death Of A Meme
Great take on the challenge, I didn’t really see that coming. I know everything you do with a song is intentional, but I didn’t care for the abrupt ending. Other than that, move along into round 2, do not pass go or collect $200.
Felix Frost - Leaving Lyman’s Liquor Store
This took 100% more focus to review than it did to write. I keep thinking I’m jumping between multiple songs, and never stay in 1 long enough to get into it. The transitions aren’t even very smooth, you’re just suddenly into something else. It’s not just musically all over the place either. Your lyrics are all over the place as well. It’s a shame that you couldn’t FOCUS on something smaller in scale because you do some interesting things musically & your voice is pleasant. I love me some 8-bit music...but more focus is needed.
Army Defense - You’re Not Paid
There’s just not much there. It’s extremely repetitive & the song really does feel like a boss harping on an employee. Not sure that’s a good thing, but there needs to be more substance here lyrically.
Alex Boyd - The Bastard Had It Coming
Some of the lyrics feel awkward, and I question the slapping of your boss. I mean if he’s so bad to warrant hitting, why not make a fist & knock that asshole out? I don’t really get the line about being late & getting wrote up. That kinda seems like how it should go down. The 1 man, 1 uke approach is a difficult road to take when you’re going up against people with more weapons, but it can be done. Robert Borden looked to be a real threat to win in the last contest, and that’s all he used. His lyrics were not as clumsy, and he had a great voice. When you have less to your song, it’s easier to see the flaws in it. So make sure it’s polished up as much as possible in round 2.
Glen Raphael - Naked
I hear a lot of excuses from people who miss deadlines. Some of them are better than others, but this is at least the 2nd time you’ve turned something in while traveling with limited resources. Well done. I’m fairly dense when it comes to getting lyrics at times, but I’m not getting how the chorus really ties in with the verses all that well. The performance & production suffer due to being on the road, so I won’t get into the flaws there.
Milton - Today’s The Day
Ok...you just used the title of my favorite song of all time...this better be good. *listens* Well, it’s not Inverse, but it MIGHT get you to round 2. I didn’t dislike the vocals, or the music (although messy at times), but nothing really stood out as great. Not the most creative lyrics, but I did find myself mouthing the chorus towards the end...so that’s a good sign.
Menage a Tune - Crowning Glory
Enjoyed the music throughout. I hope your new team sticks with you, cause they’re good. Easily one of the best this round in terms of lyrics & story. The vocals were good about 66% of the time. Enjoy your first non-shadow entry of round 2.
Rats Of The Sky - Two Weeks Notice
One of the best raps to be entered into SpinTunes thus far. Granted, there hasn’t been A LOT of them, but this meets the challenge twice, it’s kinda catchy, and the lyrics are what I’d expect from a rapper. (creative) I hope you make it to round 2.
Wait What - Middle Management
This was going along ok until the line, “But she smells like a wet chihuahua with gas.” The line didn’t get a laugh (for the right reason) & it didn’t really fit either. Right after that line we get a pretty weak chorus. Musically this is the best I’ve heard from you. Lyrically I only dig about half your lyrics & hate the other half. So I end up with moments I enjoy, but an overall experience I wouldn’t seek out again. I’ll keep listening & look forward to the moment you put it all together just right.
Ross Durand - I’m Lyin’
Hey, look at that. Someone went for an emotional response other than anger or joy while using a creative take on the challenge...and they did it well. I hope everyone else is taking notes, cause this is how it’s done. Great EVERYTHING.
“Buckethat” Bobby - On The Pogey
This song is so much better after a quick Google search of “Pogey”. :p Musically...it’s...well...not much. But the performance & story telling is comedic & well done. You’ll probably have this stuck in your head even if you’re too lazy to look up “Pogey”.
Hudson And Day - It Worked Out
After hearing the first song from Hudson & Day I was more than a little scared to click play on this one. I’d have changed bandnames just to distance myself from that one song. But with my cursor on the mute button I began to listen....and I was SHOCKED. The music is nothing like the music I’ve heard from Hudson in the past (that’s not good or bad just a fact), and Day can actually sing. The overall feel of the song was perfect. Relaxed & pure joy. I liked how most of the lyrics didn’t really go into detail about the job because then I can be about anyone’s job. My least favorite lyrics were “My last day filling the paper tray / My last day getting your coffee” because they DID mention details of the job. Excellent work...and hopefully this is what people find if they ever Google search “Hudson And Day”...and not that other song.
The Orion Sound - Praying
You tried to cram a bit too many words into a few places & in a couple spots you don’t pronounce everything all the way through, but this is entertaining nonetheless. I don’t think you’ll need the popular vote to save you this time around. It's always risky joking about the things you talk about in a contest though. We've had judges knock songs down for being "offensive" in some way in the past. This got the biggest laugh from me of this round. Loved it.
Emperor Gum - Pygmalion
Nice interpretation of the word “work”. I know you’ve improved your vocal recording a lot over the past few years, but you seem more confident as well. The vocals still need work, but it’s yet another step in the right direction. The idea you had isn’t bad, but the lyrics weren’t all that creative & the length of the song made me lose interest about halfway through.
Jeremy Lambright - Empty Spaces
My only compliant with this song is the vocals. They aren’t clear enough & they’re too low in the mix. If I didn’t have the lyrics in front of me I would have missed half of it. The song is pretty long, but I’m not sure that’s a problem. It’s hard to tell until I can hear a mix with better vocals. The music was cool, so if the vocals were better it might hold my attention for 5 minutes.
David Ritter - Graveyard
This song started before I had released the mouse button. What’s the hurry? You take a cool topic like zombies, but don’t bother to tell an interesting story lyrically. This just seems more rushed than your other recent entries.
EvelBist - The Beginning Of The End
You have a nice sound here, but the lyrics aren’t for me. I like detailed stories that are easy to follow, and I don’t really want to have to think about meanings of specific lyrics. It doesn’t make your lyrics bad, it just makes them again...not for me.
Gorbzilla - The Last Last Day
I like the fact that you used the challenge to make a personal statement on a political issue that directly affects you. I like your vocals, but I think the song needs a little more than the guitar. The lyrics are ok, but I’d change the line, “Because life is such a bitch”. It just sounds awkward, and if you’re going to use strong language to make a strong point or emotional peek, it shouldn't come off sounding so unsure.
The Boffo Yux Dudes - The Ballad Of JJR
Toward the end you hint that he might be leaving town or quitting, but you never really say what he’s doing for sure. Just sounds like he’s in fear of his life & going off the grid for a little while to me. I don’t know. You walked the line, and there’s going to be discussion about this one... The song itself isn’t bad, but whether you hit the challenge enough is the issue.
Trader Jack - Last Day
I’ll start off by simply saying I enjoyed this. It’s another just really joyful song, that could be about any job. But there are 2 things that keep this from being really high in my rankings. The first thing is the vocals. The second thing is the really weird section that you forgot to write actual lyrics for & instead used a lot of “What’s”, “Woah’s” & “I don’t know’s”.
Godz Poodlz - It’s A Great Day At BigMart Today
I’m not a fan of the audio effects & stuff used in this. I actually had to double check the file to make sure I didn’t upload some sort of corrupted file. I can see a really cool music video being done for this, but the song as is, takes too much work to listen to. Too much going on. “Made in China, destroyed right here. . .” is a great line though.
Heather Miller - Not Gonna Miss Your Face
Rotten eggs to the face huh? I don’t think you’ll be working for me anytime soon. ;p You mention on your blog about waiting until the last 3 hours to write & record this, and that’s what it sounds like. It sounds like a REALLY rough demo of what could be one of the better songs of this round. But since production does count in SpinTunes, and you have none of it...I don’t know if you’ll make it to the next round. Well done though.
Chocolate Chips - My Own Boss
4 lines for an entire song? Really? You stretched it out to make the minimum requirement, but come on, you have to know you’re going to have trouble holding someone’s attention with this. I can understand if there was some other element that was just so incredible & amazing that it made us forget about lyrics...but that element just isn’t there. I used more words in this very short review than you did in your song.
Dex01 - Brand New Life (Shadow)
I think you did a fine job of telling the story, and I could hear the vocals. (if I remember correctly I had trouble with your previous entry) There is a problem with the vocals though. Aside from not being the greatest performance & a little bit too up front, however you recorded them just didn’t come out clean. The music isn’t bad, but it needs something to mix it up a little more. Not bad.
Dr. Lindyke - Mayan Holiday (Shadow)
Lyrically it’s probably my favorite of the bunch, and the idea is different from everyone else so you get props for that as well. The production is...not there, but I know you don’t care, and your performance always makes up for that anyways. As is, if you were in the contest, this is a top 5 entry for me.
Zoe Gray - Say Goodbye (Shadow)
Whatever Sammy & Howie say about you, ignore it. You just kicked some serious butt & you’re only 11. Tell your dad I can give him Sammy’s address if need be.
Greg Hosack - I’m Gonna Go (Shadow)
It’s disappointing that you didn’t find out about the contest in time to sign up. Vocals need to be brought down at bit in places. It runs a little bit long for me, but other than that...I have no issues with this song.